2011年5月18日 星期三
Comparing - 3
When it comes to popular entertainer on the music scene in Taiwan, Jay Chou is the best one, and Lee Hom Wang is too. Lee Home Wang and Jay Chou is alike in many ways. For example, Lee Hom Wang is a singer, so is Jay Chou. Also, both Lee Hom Wang and Jay Chou play the piano. In addition, not only is Lee Hom Wang a director, but Jay Chou is. Last but not the least, both of them are good actors. I think they are so gifted and versatile.
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When it comes to popular entertainer on the music scene in Taiwan, Jay Chou is the best one, and Lee Hom Wang is too.=>~entertainers~is one of the best singers,and ~(未完~
回覆刪除第一行的entertainer 要加s喔
回覆刪除第三行Lee Home Wang and Jay Chou is alike in many ways. 是are alike
大概就這些 是說這篇有點短耶....
可以再加長XDD
Also, both Lee Hom Wang and Jay Chou (can)play the piano.
回覆刪除是不是要加can哩!
可以在句子後方加上一些補充句喔!
像電影的方面就可以提到一些...
像不能說的秘密 (Secret)和戀愛通告(Love In Disguise)都是難得的好片之類的~
多加一些補充把篇幅加大!
這次的列點和比較讓人一目瞭然~
題材和分類比較也不錯=)
不過要記得多加些篇幅喔><
感覺好像比較的東西沒有很多！
回覆刪除可以再加一點東西，
比如說 good actor
他們兩個的代表作之類的~
When it comes to popular entertainer on the music scene in Taiwan, Jay Chou is the best one, and Lee Hom Wang is too.
→感覺怪怪的，你已經說了the best了！
好像就不能這樣寫!
可以改一下!!
entertainer可以數喔
回覆刪除Jay Chou is the best one, and Lee Hom Wang is too.這句好像有點太主觀~
還有阿the best one只有一個 所以Lee Hom就不能在too囉~
not only is Lee Hom Wang a director, but Jay Chou is.is要放在but後面~
good-->excellent可能會比較好喔~
然後both重複的有點多呢~可以參考別的寫法喔
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Lee Home Wang and Jay Chou is alike in many ways.
>>>L Lee Home Wang and Jay Chou are alike in many ways
可以增加多一點故事情節喔
大致上都不錯
Lee Home Wang and Jay Chou is alike in many ways.
回覆刪除-->Lee Home Wang and Jay Chou are alike in many ways.
如果多一點會更豐富喔,例如每個句子後都在補充個一句
entertainers
回覆刪除第三行are alike
第四行,(and) so is Jay Chou.
→ In addition, not only Lee Hom Wang but Jay Chou is a director.
結論句怪怪的欸＠＠ (( 妳趕出來的厚xD
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