Due to being enthusiastic about helping people by nature, I take delight to come to one’s aid. I give someone a hand spontaneously, whenever I come cross those who are in need. Thanks to the advantage, I have ever won the award, which represented I help with zest in my elementary school days. Plus, I usually received numerous of thanks cards from my fellow students as I was a junior high student. I am pleased with my good deeds. I deeply believe in that deeds are better than words when people need help. Hence, I, all the time, prefer taking action to uttering a word.
In the free time, I like to go jogging, which not only urge me develop a strong body but improve my endurance and willpower. In addition, music is requisite in my daily life. I regard music as a cordial as something annoy me. Better more, music is a nutrition, preventing me from being in a bad mood.
ㄜ...整偏雜雜以外 沒提到重點欸:((
回覆刪除好像是想到什麼寫什麼@@?!!! 你可以依照九登跟咪咪嬸嬸那樣去寫比較好唷:)
開頭有點突然!
回覆刪除urge me develop--> urge me to develop
我覺得可以在寫更多關於自己的事耶~可以更豐富
well.......
回覆刪除講到的東西有點少耶...
可以再多寫一點~
with zest
回覆刪除這個字有點艱深= =
可改成enthusiasm=)))
(這個比較有看過)
這篇可以改的更生活一點~
感覺會比讓教授更貼近妳一點=)))
其他也可以多加補充來擴大篇幅!!!