2011年4月27日 星期三
Comparing - 2
Both John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are very important for Americans because they are important role in the American Revolution. Also, John Adams was the signer of Declaration of Independence, and so was Thomas Jefferson . More than this, Thomas Jefferson studied and practiced law. Similarly, John Adams studied and practiced law. Last but not the least, John Adams and Thomas Jefferson was the second U.S. president and the third U.S. president respectively. According to above formations, we realize how important they would be.
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Both John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are very important for Americans because they are important role in the American Revolution.
回覆刪除-->roles
John Adams and Thomas Jefferson was the second U.S. president and the third U.S. president respectively.
was-->were
最後一段空兩格
important role >> important roles
回覆刪除realize > know 比較適合
Both John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are very important for Americans because they are important role in the American Revolution.
回覆刪除可以用過去是吧
再講他們以前是..
是important roles喔!!!
回覆刪除John Adams and Thomas Jefferson was the second U.S. president and the third U.S. president respectively.這句用了兩個and，讓句子有點怪怪的~
John Adams and Thomas Jefferson were both the president of U.S.
後面再用補充句補充次序=)
Both John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are very important for Americans because they are important role in the American Revolution.=> Both John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are very important for Americans because they play significant roles in the American Revolution.
回覆刪除Last but not the least, John Adams and Thomas Jefferson was the second U.S. president and the third U.S. president respectively.=>第幾任應該不用寫出來~畢竟重點是他們都擁有相同的職位
John Adams and Thomas Jefferson was the second U.S. president and the third U.S. president respectively.動詞要用複數喔 were
回覆刪除可惡被咪咪搶走了我的台詞
important出現兩次耶，可以用crucial唷!:)
回覆刪除倒數四是were唷!
最後ㄧ句→(空兩格唷)According to above formations(information吧，不可數吧), we (這邊加個can字會不會比較好) realize how important they (were).
其餘皆順暢~
第一行 Both John Adams and Thomas Jefferson are very important for Americans because they are important role in the American Revolution.
回覆刪除整個是過去的事 are應該改成were喔 然後有兩個人 所以role要加s
其他的沒啥問題XDDD