2011年5月18日 星期三

Contrasting - 2

  According to the two resumes from people applying for being an English instructor, I have to choose the best one for our school.  After pondering a long time, I select Debra Fines, who comes form Philadelphia.  There are some comparisons between two people.  First of all, in educational status, Debra Fines is a BA English, MA English, and PhD Linguistics; however, Lynn Whitnall is a  BA Spanish. Next, in employment experience aspect, Debra Fines is more veteran than Lynn Whitnall.  In the last place, though Lynn Whitnall is fluent in Spanish, French, Japanese, but I just would like to hire a person, who is expert in English.  Above the mention, which is why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn Whitnall.

9 則留言:

  1. In the last place, ~ a person, who is expert in English.
    這句有點怪~
    可以以多加強調Debra其他優點代替!!!
    像是出版物和游泳方面~

    which is why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn Whitnall.
    是that is why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn Whitnall. 吧~

    in educational status...
    這個用的不錯ㄟ=)

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  2. Debra Fines is a BA English, MA English, and PhD Linguistics是說 這個人不是物品喔 後面接的都是物品 怪怪的~

    though Lynn Whitnall is fluent in Spanish, French, Japanese, but I just would like to hire a person 這句though跟but只能擇一

    Above the mention, which is why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn Whitnall.
    Above the mention are the reasonS why I~

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  3. After pondering a long time, I select Debra
    >>>>這句沒有句號喔
    我覺得用過去是會比較好喔

    其餘的都還ok

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  4. 前面可以提一下這兩個人是誰
    First of all, in educational status, Debra Fines is a BA English, MA English, and PhD Linguistics;
    不是這樣寫的耶~
    Above the mention, which is why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn Whitnall.
    --> according to what is mentioned above, that's why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn Whitnall.

    恩~像這種要注意唷~BA English, MA English..先知道他是什麼再寫

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  5. After pondering a long time
    >> After pondering for a long time

    I select Debra >> I selected Debra

    Above the mention >> From waht is mentioned above

    which is why I employ >> it is why I employ

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  6. 第三行的comes form 打錯了 是comes from
    第四行There are some comparisons between two people.
    two前面要加the

    第五行Debra Fines is a BA English, MA English, and PhD Linguistics; however, Lynn Whitnall is a BA Spanish. 這樣寫怪怪的 因為那些是學位

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  8. 人不知道可不可以用select 唷:)
    第五行There are some comparisons between two people(→ them).
    The reasons which I mention above are why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn
    Whitnall.
    這樣好嗎 不然我覺得原句怪怪的@@

    我喜歡開頭。ˇ。 用in解釋在哪一方面的用法還不錯:D



    ((我白痴到勾到勾勾,所以不算遲給comment > < ))

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  9. According to the two resumes from people applying for being an English instructor, I have to choose the best one for our school. (According to 放在這邊怪怪的~
    有點制式的感覺~可是後面你又接I~語氣要調整可能會比較好喔!!)
    Above the mention, which is why I employ Debra Fines instead of Lynn Whitnall.(~,you can know that why~)
    整篇文章內容可再加強豐富度喔~
    感覺就是少了點什麼><

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